I'm still astonished at the number of writers who begin their email queries with the old school business letter format:
1 Reef Avenue
The Center of the, Universe 11111
The only thing worse is when they start with their own name and address:
1 Clueless Court
Not Even Close, TU 00000
Maybe this will help: if you can tell me ONLY one fact that will make me want to read your book what would it be?
Would it be your name?***
I hope you answered no.
If you did not answer no, please feel free not to query. We're not a good match.
My guess is you want to tell me about the compelling conundrum your protagonist is facing.
Thus, you start your query with THAT. Lead with your most enticing information.
I know I've railed about this before but honestly, at least a DOZEN queries today had this error.
The seas will soon be too salty with my tears of woe if this keeps up.
**exceptions to this: Lee Child, Dennis Lehane, Alafair Burke, Sophie Littlefield, John Sandford